Milriel and green Orieth

[ladykarie]

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Character
Name: Milriel
Rank: Green Weyrling/ Senior Apprentice Dragonhealer
Gender: Female
Age: 20
Origin: Ista Weyr

Appearance: Milriel stands at 5'3" and weighs in at about 125 pounds. She has a well muscled willowy body from being a dragonrider for six turns. She has long black hair that is kept in a braid. She tends to wear dark colored clothing and trousers only, she hardly wears dresses or skirts. Her face is an oval shape and her eyes are a medium dark blue coloring with a few specs of green. She has a small, pert nose on a medium sized face.

Family:
Mother- Millie, 50, Journeywoman Healer, Ista Weyr
Father- T’riel (55) and brown Eldeth, Ista Weyr
Sister- Emrie (26) and green Arrenth (8), Ista Weyr
Sister- Mierel (23) and green Inareth (4), Ponaa Weyr (by Gold Lamenth/ Bronze Brakith)
Sister- Leirem, 17, Senior Apprentice Healer, Ponaa Hold

Sexual Orientation: Heterosexual

Personality: Milriel is very understanding with young children. She has a temper with a long fuse. When she loses her temper, she tends to glare at everyone. Though she does talk to people but only if she has too when she's in a foul mood. She was stunned when little Orieth walked up to her with a piece of her shell in her mouth. It was all she could do to keep from laughing and crying at the same time at her little Orieth. She is enjoying the challenge of Weyrling Training. She takes on every challenge with enthusiasm and excessive energy. She loves her lifemate and is afraid of doing something wrong that would hurt Orieth.

Hobbies/Skills: She's very adept at doing what she's told and doesn't complain. She is skilled at wingmending and wing strains.
Pets: None

History: Milriel was born at Ista Weyr to a dragonrider father and a crafter mother. She was born the second to last child of four, and all girls! She was usually into things that she shouldn't have. She never really liked the word 'no' when she was a child, until she turned 10. She was helping in the Kitchens and she was told no when she asked if she could help with cutting the tubers instead of cleaning off tables in the Dining Cavern. So, she started cutting tubers. The Head Cook had seen her cutting the tubers and knew she had been told no. She already had a chore. He walked over to her and nearly yanked her off the stool. She was about to cut a tuber but the knife missed and cut the back of her hand. The Head Cook immediately took her to the Infirmary. From then on, Milriel did as she was told. She apprenticed to the Dragonhealer Craft at the age of 12. She was about to make Journeywoman status at the age of 17, when she was searched for a clutch at Igen Weyr. She never impressed so she transferred to Ponaa Weyr. A clutch had already hatched by the time her transfer had been approved. She impressed to Orieth. Despite the fact that the Gold egg had been taken. It didn’t phase Milriel one bit. Shortly after her impression, her sisters, Mierel and Leirem, came. She learned that her two sisters had transferred there from home, but they wouldn’t say why.


Dragon
Name: Orieth
Age: Less than 1 Turn
Color: Green
Sire/ Dam: Gold Sharieth/Bronze Nemenath

Appearance: Orieth is a very small dragon. Her delicate frame though small is very well portioned and allows for a rather beautiful look. She has a very mid green tone the color of fresh grass. Her tone is almost even over her entire body except for the slight lighting of it on her stomach and neck. The shading difference is so minuet the it is barely noticeable. Her wings are the same shade as her stomach and though thin looking are very strong.

Personality: Orieth is calm and a little reserved most of the time. However, when her curiosity is aroused, she becomes inquisitive and a little bit hyper. She likes people and other dragons, and is rather social, but not as talkative as some. Drills are fun for her, because her coordination is quite good. She enjoys a good bath and oiling like the rest, but particularly enjoys having the oil well rubbed-in. Just after hatching she is afraid of losing her rider. Gradually this fear will fade.

History: As Kidreth impressed so did a rather silly green called Orieth. Milrielmine! The little green called to the willowy short girl.

Come over here, silly! Milriel called to her life mate.

Do I have too?? The little green complained. I don’t wanna!

Your hungry! I can feel and hear your stomach growling… Milriel replied.

Weyrling Class: 6

[LyricalBlue]

Ok a few notes for you to work on until Mem or HG get back. First off I'd like to see a little more detail in your character's personality and her description. If you need examples, take a look at some already created bios.

Next, she wouldn't have made Journeywoman by 17, especially if she is a normal weyrbrat. Most crafters don't walk the tables until their 20s and women crafters of rank are rare at this time. Those are the two major ones I see, a couple minor notes are that (And alot of people forget this) dragons are not human, they don't speak like a human would. Ie: slangs, conjunctions.
And your timeline is a little weird, if the clutch hatched before she had been transfered she wouldn't have Impressed. So you need to fix that, otherwise it looks pretty good to me.

[Memorie]

Why does she attack every challenge with enthusiasm and excessive energy? What makes her tick? You're saying what she does, but not why. Please, more detail.

Blue is right on the dragon thing. And the sample RP needs to be longer.

I'm sorry. If you want the character, you have to do the work. That's all there is to it.